Sunday, September 5, 2010

best writing

arrrrrrrrrrrr the building shook and trembled. It chaos everywhere, people running and screaming. I look for my family I can not see them ,woe arr I tripped over I am unsteady. The ground is splitting, My house , ooh no the walls gone, at least I'm safe.

Well I might be exaggerating but I would still hate to be there. we really are lucky!

I learnt that it is great to use voice,
I think that I used voice well,
Next time I will prove read bette


  1. I think you might have got out of the habit of putting correct punctuation in your writing. Can you go back and check?

  2. Good Zia you described how it would fell someone