best writing

arrrrrrrrrrrr the building shook and trembled. It chaos everywhere, people running and screaming. I look for my family I can not see them ,woe arr I tripped over I am unsteady. The ground is splitting, My house , ooh no the walls gone, at least I'm safe.

Well I might be exaggerating but I would still hate to be there. we really are lucky!

S.A
I learnt that it is great to use voice,
I think that I used voice well,
Next time I will prove read bette